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Old 09-14-2006, 03:47 PM
every1hastheright every1hastheright is offline
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Default A little Poetry

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Together we stand with one mind,one heart,one voice, and one soul!

Stand together as one and we will be free.
Stand apart we will be conquered.

Come together is what we should do, to conquer all hate,lose,and fear. To be able to fight the battle and win the war.

We are of one Nation with God as our leader. We may lose a couple of battles, but we as a Nation will come out on top in the end.

There is no room for hatred amoung our fellow people, no room for outcast, protest, insanity, or second guessing.

As a group, a Nation we shall strive for success, freedom, strength, and confidence.

Not perfection!! Not one thing or person is perfect. Become strong as one, expected the unexpected, unleash the dragon, fight for what's ours!!

We shall bring everyone together. No one person different, we are all the same.

As a strong and undefeated Nation treat everyone with the same equality.

We was brought here together and we will end here together!!

Written on June 9th, 2005
~~~>>>Please tell me your thoughts about this poem<<<~~~
This is a poem I wrote when I was feeling very unhappy about what was going on in the world around me....there are more where this one came from....[url]www.poetrypoem.com/sparklingbrowneyes2[/url]

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Old 09-14-2006, 06:18 PM
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trully beutiful and inspiring poem, you have great talent, maybe people will listen...though it is our nature to do whats worse for us
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Old 09-15-2006, 10:11 AM
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Thank you so very much....but I really thought that I would get move views then 9 althought I hope it will help people understand a little bit about who I am as a person. I'm not ever trying to make a stir in any situation just want people to know my cocerns and how I feel and am as a person. I such a big heart and I wish that I could just make everyone like each other but thats not going to happen.
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Old 09-15-2006, 02:23 PM
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Well written poem man..... given its content, you would get a warm reception at republican party HQ as its perfect for Bush melodrama...... no offence intended but it was stirringly Republican in orientation.. The religous imagry tried in with the Freedom references make it very attractive to many given the US situation at present.... That said, it was well written and Zekos is right, you do have talent for poetry...
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Old 09-16-2006, 03:20 PM
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Default nice.

nice indeed it has that certain feel...
i have done some my self.
have a bite of the Finnish style darkness.
in a song form but who cares...

-Spinning-

if i remember, i was a little boy
some time beyand, but was
hard to believe hard to hang on to
my mother used to tell me,
"don't cross that road"
she was right
(ofcorse)

i wanted to explore i wanted to know more.
i wanted to touch, i wanted to see what
follows i wanted to understand
i wanted that she loves me
but all she does

she just spinned me around

as i turned twelwe i began to grow
to grow to the part i beleved in
in this grand show
as i turned fiveteen i was in love
that love was foiled
(as such things are which are raw)

i wanted to explore, i wanted to know more

she just spinned me around
she just spinned me around
she just spinned me around
she just spinned me around (with a touch of finger)

As i grew up with my angst
i begone to realize
most of the others were just fakes
with a big smile
like politicants without honour,
like a police up for a bribe

i wanted to explore i wanted to know more.

she just spinned me around
she just spinned me around
she just spinned me around
she just spinned me around (around the town)

as i tryed to study and stay
on the path i was blown away
by this seducing act
did not know where it would lead
in tears it was bound to be at

i wanted to explore, i wanted to know more

she just spinned me around
she just spinned me around
she just spinned me around (never more)
she just spinned me around (would i stay intact)

as i was laying in my ruins
this sudden light appeared in the act
this calm steady hand, took me
and showed me the place to be at

i wanted to explore, i wanted to know more

she just spinned me around
she just spinned me around
she just spinned me around (i knew this already)
she just spinned me around ( but at least i was happy)

or she did not know
i was cautious to place my eggs
in the single bowl
my senses have been
over the scene

she just spinned me around.
she just spinned me around. (whispering death)

i knew the bowl had some cracks
but atleast it was intact

she just spinned me around

before i began to realize
it was once again too late
now i live my life in a
different state

without nothing is
easy be
but does it really
get you the ansvers you seek?

now im too tired to explore, i dont want it no more

she just spinned me around (i hated it)
she just spinned me around (i loved it)
she just spinned me around (i would perfer that she wouldn't)
she just spinned me around (but in the end i couldn't)

or was i just dreaming?
such things in this world
such sadness
you cant really put it to words
inside
you are dying
a bit by bit
every day
away



written ~2006

yes.. this was a poem i wrote when i was VERY unhappy about the things
which were going around me.

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Old 09-17-2006, 11:07 AM
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nice indeed it has that certain feel...
i have done some my self.
have a bite of the Finnish style darkness.
in a song form but who cares...

-Spinning-

if i remember, i was a little boy
some time beyand, but was
hard to believe hard to hang on to
my mother used to tell me,
"don't cross that road"
she was right
(ofcorse)

i wanted to explore i wanted to know more.
i wanted to touch, i wanted to see what
follows i wanted to understand
i wanted that she loves me
but all she does

she just spinned me around

as i turned twelwe i began to grow
to grow to the part i beleved in
in this grand show
as i turned fiveteen i was in love
that love was foiled
(as such things are which are raw)

i wanted to explore, i wanted to know more

she just spinned me around
she just spinned me around
she just spinned me around
she just spinned me around (with a touch of finger)

As i grew up with my angst
i begone to realize
most of the others were just fakes
with a big smile
like politicants without honour,
like a police up for a bribe

i wanted to explore i wanted to know more.

she just spinned me around
she just spinned me around
she just spinned me around
she just spinned me around (around the town)

as i tryed to study and stay
on the path i was blown away
by this seducing act
did not know where it would lead
in tears it was bound to be at

i wanted to explore, i wanted to know more

she just spinned me around
she just spinned me around
she just spinned me around (never more)
she just spinned me around (would i stay intact)

as i was laying in my ruins
this sudden light appeared in the act
this calm steady hand, took me
and showed me the place to be at

i wanted to explore, i wanted to know more

she just spinned me around
she just spinned me around
she just spinned me around (i knew this already)
she just spinned me around ( but at least i was happy)

or she did not know
i was cautious to place my eggs
in the single bowl
my senses have been
over the scene

she just spinned me around.
she just spinned me around. (whispering death)

i knew the bowl had some cracks
but atleast it was intact

she just spinned me around

before i began to realize
it was once again too late
now i live my life in a
different state

without nothing is
easy be
but does it really
get you the ansvers you seek?

now im too tired to explore, i dont want it no more

she just spinned me around (i hated it)
she just spinned me around (i loved it)
she just spinned me around (i would perfer that she wouldn't)
she just spinned me around (but in the end i couldn't)

or was i just dreaming?
such things in this world
such sadness
you cant really put it to words
inside
you are dying
a bit by bit
every day
away



written ~2006

yes.. this was a poem i wrote when i was VERY unhappy about the things
which were going around me.
Yea, unhappyness seems to stir the poets pen more then happyness.... well written Torps..
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Old 09-19-2006, 12:47 PM
every1hastheright every1hastheright is offline
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Well written poem man..... given its content, you would get a warm reception at republican party HQ as its perfect for Bush melodrama...... no offence intended but it was stirringly Republican in orientation.. The religous imagry tried in with the Freedom references make it very attractive to many given the US situation at present.... That said, it was well written and Zekos is right, you do have talent for poetry...
Okay, I would like to say thank you Exo1...poetry is how I express my feelings and thoughts as a women. Everyone can relate to them some how. And as for the Republican and Democratic thing...I've never had someone say that before and it was pretty awesome to hear it, but just to let everyone know I'm not Republican or Democrate. For the simple fact there are things I don't argee with on the Republicans side and things I don't agree with on the Democratic side.

Thanks,
Desiree'
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Old 09-19-2006, 12:52 PM
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Okay, I would like to say thank you Exo1...poetry is how I express my feelings and thoughts as a women. Everyone can relate to them some how. And as for the Republican and Democratic thing...I've never had someone say that before and it was pretty awesome to hear it, but just to let everyone know I'm not Republican or Democrate. For the simple fact there are things I don't argee with on the Republicans side and things I don't agree with on the Democratic side.

Thanks,
Desiree'
Your welcome Desiree, thing is that alot of people share your desillusenment with Politics.... cant blame them really, its heading into crazy land pritty quickly...
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